Adding detail to sentence

                                                 

Adding Detail To Sentences

A complex sentence has more than one clause. It has added detail giving the reader more information. It adds interest and makes writing JUICY.

You can add to the

beginning

middle

end

of simple sentences.

 

Mr Jacobsen was our coach on the confidence course.

When we went to camp Mr Jacobsen was our coach on the confidence course.

Mr Jacobsen who helps us is our  coach on the confidence course.

                                             

                               

Mr Jacobsen was our coach on the confidence course When we went to camp .

When we heard that we we're doing sailing  I was nervous about sailing on camp.

I was  nervous as we went by the sailing boats for sailing on camp.

           

I was nervous about sailing on camp because it was my first time .

When we finished sailing  we went abseiling.

we went on this challenging obstacle which was called abseiling.

we went abseiling When it was nice and sunny .

Kawau Island

Next week Year 6 are going to camp at Kawau Island. We are going to do Activity there Like Volley ball,Walking and swimming. I can't wait until we play some touch our other sports. I hope Mr Coops Dinner taste Nice.

Our Trip to Kawau Island

;Camp Benzon on Kawau Island

Use these 2 sites to answer questions and present on your blog:

Camp Benzon   http://www.campbentzon.co.nz/photos.htm

Kawau Island  http://www.kawauisland.org.nz/index.php?content=generalInfo.htm

WALT: find information from several sites about our upcoming camp at Kawau Island.

Learn Create Share

1. Which cove or harbour is Camp Benzon  in? North Cove

2. Copy an image of Kawau Island (a map)  showing the cove or harbour our camp is in.  

3. How many kilometres from the mainland is Kawau Island?  8kms off the coast about 45 km north of auckland

4. Where do you catch the ferry from (what town) to get to Kawau?  Hauraki Gulf islands‎

5. List 6 activities you can do at camp. FITNESS TRAIL, WALKING, SWIMMING, FISHING,ABSEILING,ORIENTEERING.

6. Find out (google) what a ‘burma trail’ is. A Burma Trail is a rope trail through the bush and over obstacles. at night with no light and blindfolded.

7. Find images of 5 native birds common to Kawau island and label them.  Grey DuckLittle blue penguinKiwiWekasSpur–winged Plover

8. How many kayaks are there? 26 Kayaks

9. Look at the images in the photo gallery and copy in one picture you are excited about. Write a sentence to explain what you are excited about and why.

10. What is the main (most predominant) native tree on Kawau Panuka

  Next week My friends and Me are going camp at Kawau Island.

I am Going to do these Activities at camp

FITNESS TRAIL, WALKING, SWIMMING, FISHING,ABSEILING,ORIENTEERING.

I can’t wait until we eat Mr Cops Nice chicken

And play Sports There.

Sione sister and friend Whispering

When I was walking I heard some one whispering In the farmhouse I walked to it and NO one was there. So I jumped over the fence and went over to see very close and still no one was there. I sneaked around the back and I saw my friend Joe with Gianna my sister. There were playing with the Pig.

So I asked Gianna And Joe what were their whispering about and said nothing. I told her to tell me and their never told me. So I just went around to the front and looked and I saw the sheep eating the fresh grass.

I saw a sheep truck coming throw my dads driveway and came here to the farm. I went Around the back and told Gianna and Joe Look there is a sheep truck in our driveway. So I leaded them to the front.

So Gianna told me what their were whispering about the lamb had to go to the freezing work because their were too old and saggy. ‘Thats why we didn’t want you to know because I know you will cry’. ‘Please don’t take them to the freezing work’ ‘No I have to take them to the freezing works because they're too old and saggy’. ‘Can you help me load them in to the truck please’ ‘OK’ I said.